Suggestions/Comments/Complaints

I would seriously like some input on what I've wrote because it helps me learn and grow as a writer. In here I do not care what you have to say, you just need to have a reason, no matter how small.

Ex. you can say this is the worst writting you've ever seen because you didn't put a period in this exact spot.
I don't care! I just want to make sure I get this right, as I plan to publish...

I hate first person writing, which is why I'm not reading this.

Past tense 3rd person Ftw.

I'm sure you're a grand writer though. ^^

I recommend you read a very short description of a chapter at the start of every chapter. This way some lazy people will read the small part instead of the whole thing. You know how many people want to say "Too long; didn't read"?

Good work on first person though.

To Rotad - I agree tht 3rd person does really well, but I find that I write better in 1sr person. But I'd still like you to at least read the 1st chapter when you get time^^

To Ghost - Well like I said I'm planning on publishing this so I want to actually have this written and read like a book. If the person doesn't want to spend the time to read it then that's fine, I understand. But I wont put in a summary just because they are lazy. Oh, and thank you^^

i like that your going big. is this your 1st book your trying to publish?

wow i will admit that was a dick move by your dad. all that work and it gets deleted? i would be pissed beyond imagination but ime a silent rager, i think it all in my mind instead of showing agression.